For this sentence (or rather, paragraph), I would try to come up with a longer explanation of the connection between the Lama and Balch quotes. I should have kept that sentence as is, except for fixing the “Balch’s article showed” into “Balch shows”, but I would have added more for the connection onto that. For example, “Both Balch and Lama prove to understand the need for more international knowledge on the subject so that a wider audience can be included in the decision-making process” or something along those lines.

While I had written some debate papers in the past, I think this paper helped improve my ability to write “naysayer” style paragraphs. When I would write a counter argument, I wouldn’t really have a structure in mind as to how I would write the paragraph so being introduced to the naysayer template helped me picture an outline of how the paragraph and the argument should look. I think also overall just having more practice writing papers, specifically with structure, have improved my writing ability and forced me to write and learn about things outside of my comfort zone: especially with this paper in particular. Overall, I think I’ve improved on quite a bit of my writing.